WELL, first off, i like how you decided to use cross hatching.. i think it actually shows a unique pen-like look.. like.... i dunno, but i attribute it to pens..

I think the pose is very dynamic, but it looks slightly tight, almost.. id make it look a little more lose (and therefore, realistic)... ways you could do this, is by bringing the chest area facing more away from the wall, and having her left arm (HER left) a bit looser..

the shading on the wall, i think you should have been a bit more.. linear with.. like as opposed to scribbles back and forth, you could do slashes.. understand?

oh, btw, i love the ripped pant hole..

okay..so..I'll try critting this. her right arm looks awkward..like she's squeezing it into her torso. Also, not sure if you intended to do this, but her hair looks a bit matted or messy. if you wanted her hair to be straight, just going in straight lines and picking up the pen when you wanted highlights, and repeatedly going over darker parts. Her fingers look a little wonky..like, their size, particularly her pinky. Not so much the position of her hand. her left humerus area + shoulder looks like part of it is missing..maybe more specific shaded regions would've helped make her body and face more defined. It kind of looks as though I'm looking at her through rain or fog.

what I like: the way her outfit looks, her star tattoos, and how you drew it on the paper..like, you can only see part of her, and she's tilted to an angle. very nifty :3

all in all: good job.

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Yes yes, I LOVE the look of cross-hatching, and thank you. C: especially with ballpoint pens, since you can get lighter and darker with that particular type as opposed to, say.. felt-tip pens.

YES. I know. See.. no guidelines = also no pose planning... poopy idea on my part >:[
and thank you for the tip, the wall was last minute so the chest thing(totally didn't notice) would make a huge difference. but you wouldn't be able to see her wonderful cleavage as well... *obsesses over boob-shading* THAT ALONE, i will admit to being proud of.. I'm usually modest, sir, but gosh.. the boobshades....

FFF WELL MAYBE I WANTED TO SHADE WITH SCRIBBLES
DONT TELL ME WHAT TO DO GOSH

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her left arm. yes.. well.. see, she was seductively staring at a boy she likes, and was squeezing her breasts together to look more appealing... yeah, that's it...
.. *cries in a corner*

yeah, messy hair was on purpose. :3 I don't like the perfectly smooth, brushed down hair especially if it's very short hair.

yeah her hand basically all looks like a rotted goldfish. T_T i could work on that.. as well as her facial shading, yes. what could I fix on her body?

thank you muchly for the tips :3

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I really like her head... alot.. Especially her eyes.. And I totally agree with the ballpoint pen vs felt tip pen thing, and being able to lighten. (though felt is fun) And Im not gonna bother to crit, cause...kan and nyx seem to have covered it... c:

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Thanks! I love her eyes as well. owo makeuuupp...
I think ballpoint pens are more fun than felt... I should ink with BP more.. I have more control over them.

Thanks dawg.

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mhmm! I kinda want to draw something in ballpoint now... kudos. its addictive.

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